She told me it was heavy
to carry around all the hate,
All of her organs were suffering
Under that eerie weight.
For her, it was like sinking down
the ocean of her own dreams,
Instead of water, grief was running
through her heart, polluting the streets.
A soul so full of hope
roaming around like a butterfly,
She asked me to make her laugh
till it really feels safe to cry.
In the strands of her hair
I saw some tickling magic,
And I want her to know;
You are going to swim through sorrows
Even if this dive feels tragic.
106 replies on “The dive”
Oh, it’s really painful tragic outlook of life. 😫😫Well said 👍
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Wonderfully penned The last ray of hope and the dive through the sorrows
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Instead of water, grief was running through her heart😭❤️❤️❤️
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❤❤❤❤
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Great writing, heavy words that sink in, took a while to float 😊🌺
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Means a lot to me.
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Beautiful!
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Great combination of words !! 🙂
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Enchanted with the outpour of ocean of your dreams
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beautiful
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This is why we have to remove ourselves from such situations to protect our sanity and health
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Exactly.
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Brilliant
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Brilliant
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I felt the same
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This piece of writing is amazing! Please keep posting blog posts like this!
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I always try.
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Poignant and beautiful!
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I felt that personally, thank you – just beautiful. <3
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Touching and Moving with a positive outlook for an end to the Grief!
It’s Beautiful!
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Beautiful poem Mermaid :)
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That was outstanding! Moving, visual, deep and expressive. I loved it.
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Means a lot.
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My pleasure Mermaid. <3 Kimba
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Dear Kajal,
So poignant and uplifting to me, truly inspirational!
I was just thinking how so many people are so shallow and never see into the actual depth of a person that they may actually even see each day in their travels, not looking past the surface or beyond the exterior or outer shell. You certainly are not such a person as you look to the inside of a person; into his or her story in order to actually understand who it is you see there before your eyes. These same shallow people are too quick to judge the other person or think they know “the book by its cover;” perhaps sometimes because many people are used to instant gratification or in too much of a hurry to care about anything else other than themselves, but other times its selfish jealousy, bigotry, prejudice and contempt toward another who has something they lack; real genuine gentle compassion within a “pure heart,” something they have not!
I love this piece as it speaks volumes to the pure and fragile heart one that’s just like the beautiful butterflies of the world having to always travel through a tragic and hostile world all-around but always “hoping” to be found, by another with these same redeeming qualities that are like magic; and “hope” is the key to carrying on until that moment comes when all the pain, suffering and grief can be released to one who will care enough to see into this pure of heart soul, that has so much to release and share; a love that grows so deep, so not to fear, to take that leap, which is in my eyes, of “faith!”
Your Friend in spirit and hope,
Lawrence
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Thank you so much, Lawrence.
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Hi Kajal, absolutely, you’re always welcome! I really like you and all that you write; you are one fine Lady and it’s my pleasure to be acquainted with you here, and I always look forward to continued dialog about each other’s writings, as well as you are free to ask me about anything as I’ll try my best to be helpful to you. God Bless You and Yours.
My Best,
Lawrence
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Dark but beautiful.
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Darkness can be beautiful Sometimes.
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Mermaids have a lot to think about.
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Sometimes.
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Beautiful. One just got to keep swimming, and move through it.
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Amazing way to capture your words 🥺 Very deep. Stay strong 🙏💪✍❤
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Your welcome ❤
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I love it when feelings are expressed with verses that rhymes. 😇 Good stuff!
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The beauty hidden in the depths of sorrow! Thanks for sharing
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Thank you for reading!
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Profound and beautifully penned…..!! ❤
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This is dark but so beautiful <3
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This is Beautiful 🙂
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Wow!! Splendid write dear 💕
So lovely use of words…
Poignantly beautiful ♥️
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Thank you, Jyoti 💕♥
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My pleasure dear Kajal😍
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Mesmerizing.
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Creativity at its best. Nice piece dear!
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Miraculous
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ART EXPRESSED IN POEM FORM. MESSAGE RECEIVED! 😀
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Thank you 😊
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Yup!
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There’s a great deal of value and meaning behind such delicate poetry. :O)
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‘O)
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Omgosh this is absolutely beautiful, sorrowful, and wonderful.
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heart wrenchingly beautiful!
‘She asked me to make her laugh
till it really feels safe to cry.’
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Love how you ended this dark piece. It was beautiful.
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Such powerful words. You really are a talented writer with the gift of prose.
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Thank you so much.
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That was amazing!
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Beautiful, tragic. True and human. I love it
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Wow
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how wonderful it must be to be loved by you.
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It’s amazingly intense…beautiful…!
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Thank you for this. A very courageous piece
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a really good poem
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Thank you so much.
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You’re welcome
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This is a really beautiful poem! <3 Thank you for sharing it with us!
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Thank you for reading ❤
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You’re very welcome! :D
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What a wordsmith and lovely emotional roller coaster ending on a high note of ray of hope and light- keep at it. Loved it.
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Well said 👍
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Beautifully written!💧°°🐬~~💦
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Thank you🧜🏻♀
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Keep blogging mermaid 🤗
Tragically beautiful poem
Keep shining…
Sunshine your way
Have a great day ☕
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Thank you.
You always radiate sunshine 🤗
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My pleasure always…
Let’s radiating rays shines more and more…
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Yuppp.
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